Gaho
(Addie Billie wearing traditional Seminole beads and patch work from Web Source.)
The old woman was crinkled and impossibly fragile.
Her skin loose and folds so deep and pronounced the old man had a hard time
imagining what she looked like as a young woman. The fire, spitting and
crackling, deepened the shadows on her face and cast an eerie orange and gold
hue to the woman.
Old Mother, she was called by his people. Gaho.
But she birthed no sons or daughters.
Her presence preoccupied the mountain cave above his
village for many moons – too many moons to count. If there had been stories of
her youth and beauty, then those stories died with his ancestors.
Although, there are stories of her kindness as well
as her wrath - he depended on those stories depicting her kindness for he had grown
old with no wife, no children, no wealth, no peace, and a wasted youth.
The fire illuminated only the spinster and the old
man. He waited impatiently for her to speak for if you spoke before her,
she would disappear into the smoke - or that is what the story told him.
Her eyelids were heavy with age and they dropped so
low he could not tell if her eyes were open or not, but her bony hand gripped a
stick to prod the fire to life. Sparks of embers shot up into the night air and
he watched them float. When he looked back at the woman, her blind eyes
were staring right at him.
His breath rattled in his old lungs, his tired
heart stumbled, and he thought he would die if her milky eyes continued to burn
his soul.
She finally ceased staring at him when she murmured with a cracked voice, “You come to ask for five wishes.”
“Yes, Gaho. Please grant me such wishes. For I was
not born in wealth, and so, I wasted my youth in war as a general. I did not
take a wife for none wanted me and I was never blessed with children of my
blood.”
Her white eyes did not stray back to his form, but
she huffed. The sound of old bones rattling as she breathed and moved.
“Rules must be followed. Five wishes deserve five dances
and songs must be performed every moon month until you are ready to pass over.”
His heart wanted to beat out of his chest as he
imagined himself living a life he would not waste.
Suddenly, a bony hand grabbed his wrist and pulled
him toward the fire. He could smell his skin burn and blister. He opened his mouth
to scream at the old woman and watched as her milky eyes brightened and then
darkened again. Trapped in her gaze, he did not realize when the wrinkles melted
away into firm and strong skin, when skimpy muscle turned big and brawny, his
gray hair shed to reveal thick, black hair or his threadbare clothes to tighten
and become strong leather.
He wept with appreciation and hope.
He left her mountain and went over the dances and
songs in his mind until he returned to his village.
Peace came immediately to the village. He danced
and sang for his five wishes when the moon month passed.
Wealth came in the form of crops and a leadership role a
month. He danced and sang for his five wishes when the moon month passed.
His wife came into his life five days later. He
danced and sang for his five wishes when the moon month passed.
Finally, his first child arrived after many moons
of dancing and singing, and many more children arrived later.
He danced and sang every moon month.
His youthful appearance was later realized to be
everlasting as his wife grew old and he did not, and his frustration and sorrow
grew as his wife died and his first child soon after her.
He took many wives and had more children. The same
ending happened. They grew old and died while he remained young.
It was not long before his frustration turned to
action and he looked to war as his answer.
He danced and sang every moon month.
He won many battles and lost many men, but he
continued to go to war. He found a certain comfort in its familiarity: the way
the sword easily slipped into a man’s flimsy skin, the crush of the hard bone
against his mallet and the spray of burning blood across his face.
He danced and sang every moon month.
Years passed until there were no more wives to tend to him and
no more children carried his bloodline.
He danced and sang every moon month.
Until he was the old man again in everything but
appearance.
He walked up the mountain and into Gaho’s home. He
looked up with a tired body and mind and watched as the old woman stood from
behind her fire - more fluidly than a woman of her age should, and walked toward
him.
He was surprised yet not when her age slipped from
her with every step she took.
When she came to stand in front of him, she watched
him with clear brown eyes with thick, black hair nearly to her knees. Her
regalia new and beautiful.
“Are you ready to pass?” She whispered quietly, her
voice soft and gentle.
Listening to her voice made him compliant, lulling
him to relax. He welcomed it and nodded his head once.
She nodded her head in answer and took his
young, firm hands in her own.
The young man before her slowly morphed into the
old man who came into this cave long ago.
He smiled at her and he finally closed his eyes to pass over.
Author's Note: I read the Pacific Northwest Native
American unit this week. My story is a combination of theme's of the stories I read this week: How Silver-Fox Created the World, How the Beaver Stole Fire, How Dog Stole Fire and The Story of Ashish. I took many themes from the stories except for the inclusion of animals.
The number five was a repetitive number in all the stories whether they were
five trees or five roasts on the fire. I decided to take the use of the number
five and include it in my story. There are five wishes in the story and I think
they are realistic wishes for nearly any culture: youth, wealth, peace, wife
and children. Fire is also a theme in the stories, so I used fire to
transform the man into his younger version. In the stories, fire did not really
behave like fire should. Animals touched fire without being burned. I thought my
twist on the fire was interesting and I like how it transformed him as well.
Gaho means mother in Hopi, and I wanted to include
the name simply because I like how it sounds. This also creates the assumption
that Gaho has been around for a long time and is also the only name I provided.
Even though the man is the protagonist in the story, he is only a blink of time
in Gaho’s lifetime. The implication that this scenario has happened before is there, and
if it is not obvious enough I will try and figure out how I can make that
easier to read.
Nice story Lauren! I liked your inclusion of the Hopi word "gaho" in your story. I thought that was a nice touch. After reading the first few lines of your story I almost felt sad for Gaho, because she's alone herself. Unless Gaho is some sort of witch/grim reaper, which could totally be possible, then I would definitely feel sad for her. As a human with the need to be around others and have that social connection, I can't see why Gaho hasn't passed herself. But, I think that's one of the things that makes your story so interesting, because it obviously got me wondering about these kind of things!
ReplyDeleteThis was a cool story, Lauren! I really liked the image of Gaho because it really set the tone for the story and gave a very clear visual for her character. You gave such vivid descriptions in your story and I liked how mysterious her character was. I felt so bad for the man and his desire to have a wife and family that loved him so I was very happy for him when this happened! It's a great reminder that beauty is fleeting and that life is short. Excellent story and I look forward to reading more of your work!
ReplyDeleteHi Lauren! I thought this was a very unique story and I feel that the image that you chose to use allows for wonderful imagery to take place. I really enjoyed the mystery in the character itself. I found that I truly felt for the man and found myself feeling thankful for the family that I have. Your details are impeccable and your story was truly a joy to read! You're an amazing writer! Great job! I look forward to reading more of your stories this semester!
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren, First of all great picture! It really put things into perspective and helped a lot in imagining the description you wrote about Gaho. Your format was great and very easy to read and keep up with. I also enjoyed the overall description, I was able to imagine every scene and the story was very creative and interesting to read. I liked the way you integrated five different themes into one story. Great job, looking forward to reading more stories!
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ReplyDeleteYour story was awesome! I didn't get to read a lot of Native American retellings that weren't about how the Earth was created, so I am glad I got to read your tale. I'm also happy that you talked about what the five wishes were in your author's note because I could only figure out the wealth, kids, and a wife ones. However I was curious as to why peace was a wish if he loved going to war and fighting all of the time. But the repetition was amazing! I love it whenever people can do it well. I really had fun reading your story, nice job!
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ReplyDeleteI didn't know what to expect when I first saw the title and the picture, but I was pleasantly surprised. You did an excellent job with description throughout your story. I like how your author's note included that Gaho meant mother. I thought that was a clever connection to make. It really shows that you put a lot of effort into your stories. Great job!
Hey, Lauren! I really liked this story a lot. I never read the original stories but I like how you explained everything in your Author's Note. I like that your inspiration for this story came from several different stories. I think you did a great job of taking that inspiration and really focusing it to create your own creative story. This story was very focused and interesting. Honestly, I wouldn't change anything about this story. The only thing I could suggest is just a little more explanation/summary of the original source stories. I was really surprised by this story because it was not quite what I expected from the title. I kind of feel sad for the old man that he waited so long to finally pass over. I like that he kind of "lived it up" at first but I'm glad he was finally able to grow old and find some peace. Great story!
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